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All information in the infobox needs to be linked to a cited statement in the body. In this case, the recording dates as well as the studios are nowhere in the body. I assume this information was derived from the booklet, so you have your source ready to go, you just need to work it in somewhere.
Dessner should be mentioned as one of the songwriters, since he has credit
"It was written by Swift, inspired by..." → "Written by Swift and Aaron Dessner, the song was inspired by..."
"Aaron Dessner composed..." → "Dessner also composed..."
"late 20th century" → "mid-20th century"
WL meme in the lede
"received acclaim from music critics" → "also received critical acclaim"
"and the United States – one of the five..." → "and in the United States, where it was one of the five..."
"whom Swift wanted to write about ever since she purchased Harkness' Holiday House in 2013."
"started reading a lot about Harkness' life and found her stories interesting." → "started reading about Harkness' life, and was interested by the stories."
"Swift stated that she was looking for a chance to write about Harkness"
Two quoting comments in the second paragraph:
First, add the Entertainment Weekly citation at the end of the sentence going "gets to gossip about", as references should always directly follow a sentence with a direct quote.
Second, at the end of the paragraph, go ""for the last verse"." → ""for the last verse."" because you're quoting a complete sentence.
Same thing re: quote placement for full sentences at the end of the third paragraph.
A little bit of a WP:REFBOMB at the end of the first paragraph. Is there a good way to spread the references throughout that para?
Same thing in the second paragraph
This might be a little complicated, but when you have that long sentence about the inaccuracies, maybe restructure the sentence/paragraph so that it starts by saying that several of the lyrics represente inaccurate stories told by the gossips, then you list the filling the pool with champagne & stealing the dog/cat.
As for where to include Dali, maybe towards the "big names" part near the beginning of the para?
General comment that topic sentences for all the paragraphs here, summarizing what was praised, might be in order. See Painting of a Panic Attack for an example.
"telling a vivid tale of Harkness' life while mocking the sexist criticism both women have received by utilizing witty couplets and "megawatt" hooks" → "utilizing "witty" couplets and "megawatt" hooks to both create a vivid picture of Harkness' life and to draw parallels between the misogynistic criticism received by both Harkness and Swift." (reduces close paraphrasing)
Usually musicians and production-only people are split into two columns, as seen in something like Uncomfortable (song), but that distinction is less important when there are only a few musicians
Lots of people editing recently, but no real edit wars or other stability disputes
Two photos, both of which are relevant to the article. One is Creative Commons and the other is public domain.
Earwig score comes up a little high, but that's almost entirely from direct quotes. If any of the longer quotes (particularly the blockquotes at the top of a few sections) can be pared down, that would be A+++.
Just got back from vacation, showered, did laundry, feel much cleaner and ready to focus. Thank you for getting started on making those changes, and I'll formally put on hold until everything else is addressed. Let me know if you have any questions! — GhostRiver16:23, 21 August 2021 (UTC)Reply
@GhostRiver: I am taking an indefinite WikiBreak. I thought I should let you know, as I will not be able to complete this GAN. I don't know when my break will end, so I think the best thing to do is to fail this nomination now, and, when (if?) I come back, and if you're still up to it, we can continue from here. I could just make all the changes you suggested, re-nominate, and go from there. I am so sorry, but I just made this decision very recently, and it is for the best. Thanks! D🐶ggy54321(let's chat!)12:20, 28 August 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Ronherry: Sorry, just getting to this now. I'd love to do a co-nomination again like we did with "Cardigan" and "Willow", if that's okay with you. GhostRiver, would we need to re-submit this formally or can we pick up where we left off? Apologies for just abandoning this last summer by the way. Thanks! D🐶ggy54321(let's chat!)00:56, 26 September 2022 (UTC)Reply