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Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Bruxton talk 15:34, 29 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Moved to mainspace by Gonzo fan2007 (talk). Self-nominated at 22:44, 12 December 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Al Treml; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: The Packers.com citation says he was with the Packers for 34 years, not 36: "Treml filled the demanding posts of film and video director for 34 years". —Bagumba (talk) 08:25, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Bagumba, fixed in the article and in ALT2. Although, at this point I actually probably prefer ALT1. Thoughts? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:25, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Gonzo fan2007: I was leaning toward ALT2, thinking a civilian reading it might not expect photography to be a skill learned while in the military. What do you feel is ALT1's selling point?—Bagumba (talk) 14:42, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Bagumba, I am fine with either. ALT1 just sounds smoother to me, but fine with whichever one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:37, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Gonzo fan2007: What if you took ALT1's start of "that before filming National Football League games, former Green Bay Packers video director Al Treml was" along with ALT2's ending, "trained in photography while in the United States Army?". Is that any smoother?—Bagumba (talk) 17:20, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Bagumba, I like it. Added ALT3. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:38, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
ALT3.—Bagumba (talk) 09:54, 22 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]


GA Review

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


This review is transcluded from Talk:Al Treml/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lightburst (talk · contribs) 18:48, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]


I will review this article. I remember it from when it was on the main page at DYK.

Review

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  1. it is a shame that we do not have any images. Have you checked for any available imagess that he may have taken?
  2. "inducted in the Green Bay Packers Hall of Fame" I suggest (into)
  3. "Vince Lombardi, the Packers head coach and general manager at the time, hired Treml as the Packers film director," unsure if (Packer's or Packers') should used in these instances or it is fine, what do you think?
  4. "longest tenured: might need a hyphen
  5. "three employees who helped filmed games and practices" might need to change filmed to (film)


Citations to do

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  1. Lead "was a lifelong Packers fan" is not repeated and cited in the body of the article
  2. Lead "Treml worked for local newspapers and TV stations" only one newspaper is listed in the body

Checked

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  1. Early life citation 1 checks out
  2. Career citation 4 is accurate in paragraph one and two
  3. Career citations 2 and 3 check out
  4. Personal life citations check out

Nice little article! Lightburst (talk) 19:14, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lightburst, thanks for the review, I think I have addressed all your comments. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:35, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Gonzo fan2007: Thanks so much for the quick response. I hope to pass the nomination this evening after another read through and final checks! Lightburst (talk) 19:40, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
    C. It contains no original research:
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    no images and the person is not deceased so non-free is not available
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
    no images so no captions
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    It was a pleasure to work with you and I am happy to approve this article for GA. Lightburst (talk) 20:16, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.