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Article has a nice start and includes necessary information. Below is a few feedback points that can potentially be touched on: - Second sentence of the "Sally Archibald" section could potentially be made into two sentences to separate interests and primary focuses. - In the "education" section put the years of study before the text that says she received her degree. - In Career, I do not think you need to put 'Princeton, New Jersey' after 'Princeton University'. - Play around with the last passage in the career section. I think the last part of the first sentence is a bit wordy. -Award section looks awesome! I think you can take "judging" out of "The judging committee". -Publications section also looks good. -Noah H. Noah.Hirshorn30 (talk) 17:44, 11 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]