Talk:Botswana/GA1

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Nominator: 48JCL (talk · contribs) 20:48, 11 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 11:46, 29 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. 750h+ 11:46, 29 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@750h+, thank you. Not sure how I just saw this. 48JCL 20:30, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies I forgot about this. Starting. 750h+ 02:01, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

prose[edit]

Feel free to refuse any suggestions, with proper justification. 750h+ 02:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

lede[edit]

• flat, with approximately 70 percent of its territory being "percent" == "per cent" (WP:BrEng)

Y Removed all instances.

• essentially the nation state of the Tswana people "nation state" ==> "nation-state"

Y Done.

• who make up 70% of the population. ==> "who constitute 70 per cent of the population." this is for consistency (70 per cent, as it's the same for above, and conciseness).

Y Done.

• Being a country of slightly over 2.4 million people, and roughly the size of France remove the comma

Y Done.

• declared a protectorate under the name of Bechuanaland ==> "declared a protectorate named Bechuanaland"

Y Done.

• As of 2024, Botswana is the third least corrupt country in the continent of Africa. remove "the continent of"

Y Done.

• Since then, it has been a parliamentary republic, with a consistent remove the comma

Y Done.

• world's biggest diamond producing country. "diamond producing" ==> "diamond-producing"

Y Done.

history[edit]

prehistory

• Stone tools and fauna remains have shown that all areas of the country were inhabited at least 400,000 years ago ==> "Stone tools and animal remains indicate that all areas of the country was inhabited at least 400,000 years ago."

Y Done.

• Botswana was reported to be the birthplace of all modern humans about 200,000 years ago. why "was reported"

Y Fixed.

• a major feature of the economy, since the remove the comma

Y Done.

• heritage site in Botswana originally occupied towards "originally" ==> "initially"

Y Done.

• states in Zimbabwe as well as to the Mapungubwe state and the notable of these was ==> "states in Zimbabwe as well as to the Mapungubwe state, and the notable of these was"

Y Done.

• The site is a respected place for the people living in the region and it is believed add a comma after "region"

Y Done.

• top of the hill together with his helpers or assistants remove "together"

Y Done.

• this settlement range from 7th to late 19th ==> "this settlement range from the 7th to late 19th"

Y Done.

• with cattle keeping as major source of ==> "with cattle keeping as a major source of"

Y Done.

• Toutswe settlement include house-floors, large heaps of vitrified cow-dung ==> "Toutswe settlement includes house-floors, large heaps of vitrified cow dung"

Y Done.

• settlements in South, Central Africa. ==> "settlements in South and Central Africa."

Y Done.

• What is "centaurs ciliaris"?

Y Removed. Not sure either, doesn't seem to be relevant to the history of Botswana.

• of the Tswana-speakers who remove the hyphen

Y Done.

• Also, before I continue with the review, every book will require its page numbers. 750h+ 04:38, 11 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Damn that took way longer than expected. — 48JCL 21:47, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

    A tag was added in the lead. Can you address that? 750h+ 06:39, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

    Also the pp. 26-143 is too far a page range, a smaller page range would be better, and they’d need to verify exactly what is on the page. 750h+ 06:42, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

    48JCL, I think that with this page range, I'm going to fail this nom. The content is not bad but the history section may benefit from cleanup. @Thebiguglyalien: may be able to help. Once these issues have been addressed i'd be happy to review, but this that some informal peer review for sourcing might help. 750h+ 07:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]